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Birth of a Lich

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Jubal:

--- Quote from: ahuggingsam on December 27, 2023, 11:53:54 AM ---Oh also, @jubal, what are the mores here about posting new versions? Should I just post new versions of the entire text as I write them or essentially post smaller new sections? (either with some common sense applied of course)

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You can do either! Whichever you think will be more helpful for you at any given moment to get feedback on, really :)

Re the reveal: I'm not sure either, but maybe it needs some indirect trailing (building up Lilith's experience and attachment to the place and her training through memories a bit more perhaps)? I don't think you need to kill your darlings in that speech at all, I'd just build up and address explicitly how the tone of the speech is in and of itself somewhat more formal, somewhat thus unsettling for the otherwise high tension situation.


--- Quote ---I also think I was getting a bit of tunnel vision
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Pun intended? ;)

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