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The Street of the Clerisy => Writing, Poems, AARs, and Stories - The Storyteller's Hall => Poetry and Artistic Writing => Topic started by: Cuddly Khan on October 08, 2011, 08:42:07 AM

Title: Khans Poems
Post by: Cuddly Khan on October 08, 2011, 08:42:07 AM
I do a bit of poetry... Maybe this will encourage me to do more.
My first one I did... while it was raining XD

The Forest

It's so relaxing; the feel of water from a shallow, fast running river over my bare, submerged feet, the safe feeling of the forest in a million shades of green.

It's so sweet; the smell of rain as the clouds empty themselves onto the earth, the sound of rain drops on the surface of the wide, beautiful river as if the water was alive and enchanted.

It's so colourful; the many flowers on the far river bank so alive with colour more numerous than the colours of a rainbow, the different birds jumping from tree to tree as their wings flapping so fast it’s just a blur.

It's so peaceful; the feel of grass on my hands as I lean back on my arms to rest my tiered muscles after a long restless day, the drips of rain water running down the side of my face as I slowly put my head back to face the sky.

It's so illuminating; the bright light of my lantern as it slowly runs out of oil and dims with every minute, the fading light of the red, orange and pink twilight as the clouds clear to reveal the sun retreating over the far horizon.

It's so calm; the sound of the crickets chirping as they wake up to the dark night, the cold breeze running through my hair as slightly moves and quivers side to side.

It's so wonderful; the sound of the millions of bugs and insects as they wake up to the falling sun, the sound of the green frogs in the wet grass as they croak into the night.

It's so relaxing; the forest.
Title: Re: Khans Poems
Post by: Jubal on October 12, 2011, 05:45:34 PM
It's nice stuff, good imagery.

Try paying a little less attention to grammar: your starting phrases would be harder hitting if they didn't have the "so" in, I suspect.

Be nice to see more.  :)
Title: Re: Khans Poems
Post by: Cuddly Khan on October 12, 2011, 08:59:36 PM
Thanks for the advise. I will try to put another one up on Saturday... which to you would be Friday I think.
Title: Re: Khans Poems
Post by: Cuddly Khan on October 27, 2011, 07:42:06 AM
Sorry. Was a bit late, wasn't I. Here it is than.

Dust to Mountains

I've seen high mountains
Wash away.
As they fall, so rise another day

Flesh fades to bone,
Bone back to dust
The sharpest blades, give way to rust.

Nations rise
And kingdoms fall
And rise again built strong and tall.

Light dims and dies,
And the night falls down.
The cursed name called with great renown.

Yet my time flows on
Amidst this waste
And the death I've seen I'll never taste.
Title: Re: Khans Poems
Post by: Ladyhawk on October 27, 2011, 08:23:06 AM
Thats very good :) Well done buddy.
Title: Re: Khans Poems
Post by: Jubal on October 27, 2011, 02:04:06 PM
That's excellent, I'd say much better than the previous one - the imagery is more concise and tighter, with less suprfluous wording. Try writing a few pieces with a definite rythmic pattern at sopme point - that will help make your words flow in a more poetic fashion.

Really nice stuff.  :)
Title: Re: Khans Poems
Post by: Andalus on October 27, 2011, 07:41:15 PM
Yep, I like it too. It reads much more poetically, whereas the other was quite prosey.
One minor technical point - you don't really need a comma after "blades". ;)

I like the 3rd line of the 4th stanza - it gives a sense of scale to the subject. Mountains washing away is something people can't really comprehend, but the "cursed name called with great renown" is something that can make them think. About the title - might "Mountains to Dust" be better? It would seem more appropriate, in my opinion.



Title: Re: Khans Poems
Post by: Cuddly Khan on October 28, 2011, 07:55:27 AM
"Nations rise
And kingdoms fall
And rise again built strong and tall."

No because they rise again. :) They don't stay dust. Think about it. ;D
Title: Re: Khans Poems
Post by: Andalus on October 28, 2011, 10:51:08 AM
Fair enough.
Title: Re: Khans Poems
Post by: Cuddly Khan on December 12, 2011, 11:16:48 AM
Just thought this up today. :) (BTW I do have friends)

Does anybody notice
When I'm mad
Do they care
When I'm sad

Do they worry
To see me cry
They just ignore me
I don't know why
Title: Re: Khans Poems
Post by: Cuddly Khan on October 22, 2012, 11:48:34 AM
Abut time for another one? Here it is. :P

That Feeling
When you get that feeling,
That you are all alone,
Everyone's around you,
But you're on your own.
 
The feeling of Emptiness
A sorrowful pain
That no one cares
And your heart feels slain
 
Have you seen in envy?
Have you seen its face?
Do you know what it is,
That feels like an empty space?

Is it that feeling of being alone,
That feeling that you're not noticed
That feeling of being on your own
That feeling that you're losing a race
Title: Re: Khans Poems
Post by: Cuddly Khan on November 23, 2012, 08:31:51 AM
I've been busy. :)


Once Again

 What is it if it's not what I think it is?
 Does it exist or is it just a thought?
 How can it be or is it not this?
 Or does my heart just need to be taught?

 I thought it was gone, but is it back?
 Did I find it or did it find me?
 Is there something that I lack?
 Is it something that I just can't see?

 Where did it go in the end?
 When did it return?
 Is it the real thing?
 Will my heart ever learn?
Title: Re: Khans Poems
Post by: Cuddly Khan on November 23, 2012, 08:32:58 AM
The Wind

What is it about the wind?
Why does the sea call as it does?
When we go to our beds at night,
Will we dream of where the wind goes?

We squander about our lives,
As the breeze goes about it's day,
Not caring for our strife,
Just going on it's way.

When a sailor tries to brave the sea,
The wind will be there guiding his ship.
To the end of the ocean, 'twill take him,
and back again for a round trip.

Back home they come,
All in glory and fame,
The sailors of today,
Too many to name.
Title: Re: Khans Poems
Post by: Cuddly Khan on November 25, 2012, 08:01:12 AM
The most beautiful thing we can experience is the mysterious. It is the source of all true art and science. ~ Albert Einstein

Questionable Universe

Why does the world turn,
Just to face the same way again?
Something that's so big,
Yet still fits inside a picture frame.

Is there just no end,
To the extent of the universe?
Is the slowness of time,
All just a cruel curse?

Before we know it,
The future will be here.
Will we be ready,
When the end is near?

How far away,
Is the brightest star?
Will we ever accept,
That it's just too far?
Title: Re: Khans Poems
Post by: Cuddly Khan on November 25, 2012, 08:05:09 AM
Not much to look at really. Not one of my best. The first bit I wrote a few months ago. The second bit a few days ago.

Today, Tomorrow

Today, tomorrow
It's all filled with sorrow
In the end
We all just pretend
Not to be sad
And just to be glad
But then there are those that are mad

They try to bring you down
As if they think they wear a crown
They take away from your confidence
They tear down your defense
And they don’t know
That even though you pretend, it will show
So we must go
And forgive and forget
Title: Re: Khans Poems
Post by: Jubal on November 25, 2012, 07:32:41 PM
They're good - the rhyme schemes are held together well, though I sometimes wonder if you put a bit more emphasis on rhyme than you need in a lot of these, it can cut the flow down a bit when you're using short lines and a lot of rhyme. Try writing some streams of conciousness, perhaps, that might help get these more introspective poems flowing a bit better. And streams of conciousness done well are awesome.

Good work anyhow, keep it up!  :)
Title: Re: Khans Poems
Post by: Cuddly Khan on November 25, 2012, 09:21:11 PM
:) Thanks, I'm playing an RPG where my character is a Bard so expect much more.
Title: Re: Khans Poems
Post by: comrade_general on November 26, 2012, 12:12:03 AM
Nice job, Khan. And kudos for being one of the remaining content-producers on here. ;)
Title: Re: Khans Poems
Post by: Cuddly Khan on November 26, 2012, 07:34:12 AM
Thanks, :P Maybe I can get a Triumph if I write enough. ;D
Title: Re: Khans Poems
Post by: Cuddly Khan on January 19, 2013, 03:26:28 AM
When writing this one I didn't exactly have quality in mind, a short poem written in a short amount of time is all it is.

Under a Willow Tree

As I sit under the willow tree,
In peacefulness and deep serenity,
With a gentle breeze flowing through my hair,
And the birds singing from above me.

I think of the future and all that's been,
and he choices I choose and all I've seen,
I wonder to myself, did I choose the right path,
And in the end, which way does my life lean?

And than I start to wonder the path I'd choose,
In the future, i know this life I'll lose,
But when I get to the crossroads of life,
What gate will I choose to enter through?

I stand up from my sitting place,
And bring my hands before my face,
"I know what I will do" I say,
"I'll live my life with this one goal,
To always try my best at everything in this eternal race".

Title: Re: Khans Poems
Post by: Cuddly Khan on October 20, 2013, 07:51:14 AM
Ok, about time for another one I guess. This one here was inspired by a picture. I wouldn't be able to find it now but here's the poem anyway. I think this is one of the best pieces that I have done.

All Alone

All alone in a field of green,
A sight of majesty to behold,
The beauty true yet unseen,
With a hidden story untold.

A tree all on its lonesome,
Covered in green hued leaves,
Singing its lonesome song,
While swaying in the breeze.

Autumn’s beauty shows,
On the leaves of the tree,
But only it knows,
The beauty it can see.

Winters cold air sweeps in,
And the leaves fall to the ground,
The white days will begin,
And the snow will surround.

Spring arrives, colour springs forth,
And lush grass greets again.
The sun comes out in warmth,
And the clouds send forth rain.

Summer comes with the radiant heat,
And the tree sits there still.
Waiting for the next season to repeat,
Another tree, never will it meet.
Title: Re: Khans Poems
Post by: Cuddly Khan on October 17, 2016, 09:46:11 PM
It's been a while since I've written one of these, hasn't it? Anyway, I wrote this short thing on a bus in the morning whilst deep in thought. I may write more on it later, but for now, enjoy.

The Ring

That ring of misery,
Black white and silver,
Too far away for me to see,
Close enough to make me shiver.

That band of sorrow,
Has finally set me free,
But in doing so
Has forever trapped me.
Title: Re: Khans Poems
Post by: comrade_general on October 18, 2016, 12:57:52 AM
Damn son. That some scurry armadillo.
Title: Re: Khans Poems
Post by: Cuddly Khan on October 18, 2016, 06:23:17 AM
Scurry? What do you mean by that?
Title: Re: Khans Poems
Post by: comrade_general on October 18, 2016, 02:27:04 PM
Title: Re: Khans Poems
Post by: Cuddly Khan on October 18, 2016, 07:53:43 PM
Hahaha, fair enough
Title: Re: Khans Poems
Post by: Cuddly Khan on October 20, 2016, 12:42:49 PM
Where are all these poems coming from? It seems I'm just in that sort of mood. This one's inspired my a song I've been listening to lately as well as recent events in my life.
The formatting seems a bit weird to me, but I don't know, it seems to work alright, so oh well.


Darkness
Don't let the darkness eat you up, it will swallow you whole if given the chance.

Keep your distance from this shadow, it is unsafe to be around, despite its cheerful look at a glance.

Stay away from this gloom and misery that has captivated you so. It's not worth the pain.

There is nothing for your benefit to be found, except for hurt and suffering to gain.

Don't let the darkness eat you up, let it go, and stop your light from becoming so dim.

Expel it from your life, ignore it's pleas for help, else your future will be naught but grim.
Title: Re: Khans Poems
Post by: Cuddly Khan on October 24, 2016, 01:44:29 PM
This one's a bit personal I suppose, but it is about you guys too. Each and everyone of you are a huge support in my life and have been for years. <3


I apologize for my inability,
And for my low self esteem.
I'm sorry for my inadequacies,
And how I'm less confident than I seem.

My self loathing is always there,
Right next to the hatred of myself.
All I can see is how worthless I am,
When compared with everybody else.

Despite all these things that I see in myself,
Some people show me things I can't see.
They encourage my success,
And make me aware of the potential in me

But when I look at all the people who care,
All my friends and all my family,
To have so many people who love me,
Makes me as successful as I ever want to be.
Title: Re: Khans Poems
Post by: Jubal on October 24, 2016, 06:30:46 PM
You are great and I am very glad I know you :) And you know Exilian is always here if you need it!

Also, enough with the excessive apologies, that's *my* character quirk :P
Title: Re: Khans Poems
Post by: Clockwork on October 24, 2016, 08:19:27 PM
You a boss Khan ;)
Title: Re: Khans Poems
Post by: Cuddly Khan on October 24, 2016, 08:26:11 PM
Thanks guys. Means a lot. ;D


I'll have more to post soon probably, we'll see. I don't know what's happened, but I've been writing a lot lately.
Title: Re: Khans Poems
Post by: comrade_general on October 25, 2016, 02:57:20 AM
KHAAAANNNN!!!!
 :khan:
;)