Lovely, beautiful language - and yeah, what was the stimulus?
The other thing, have you considered playing with more unorthodox word order a bit more at times? If you haven't it's worth thinking about, e.g. "and there was light enough to run down its victim." (that wasn't a great example, but it's the kind of thing I mean). That might inject a bit more of a poetic feel into your descriptions, just a thought.