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Thanks for the feedback! I'll definitely try to keep those things in mind more as i write more poems.

Something i did with Ouroboros was have the last word of the first and last line of each stanza be the same to represent the repetition of the theme. Having more repeating aspects could be a fun idea though, especially having the first line also be the last line. I might see if i can come up with a third stanza in there to use that.

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Whale maybe it's not so imperative for us to know. It does make me wonder though.

I might organise them cronologically at some point. That sounds like a good idea. I would love some critique on any or these poems as even if they are mostly me venting emotions, I'd love to be able to inprove my poetry. Here are two more poems.

Ouroboros

Around and around in circles again
Repetition is my old new friend
With my tail in my mouth there is no end
Back to the same place all over again

From start to end and back to the start
No way to pull this cycle apart
Arrive in one second and then depart
Finding myself trying to restart


Super Nova

Super nova, a dying star
Burns so bright, fades so fast.
The brief light shows what we are
Not the first, won't be the last

Exloding in briliance and wonder
Only to dim to so quick to dark.
A raidience we can only remember
It's rays so bright they leave a mark.

It leaves a memory bittersweet
Look back to when it did shine
A moment so short and fleeting
As it burns for the last time

Thanks! I can't wait to show all the things I've been doing the past few years!

It's good to be back. 

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Damn! I started this 12 years ago and still no one has claimed victory! I wonder what the longest period of time between posts is. That would tell us who was the closest to winning this so far i suppose right?

Anyway, looks like it's also become some sort of other game. Much fun to be had!

Oh, i also finished Uni just this year, so I've got some art to share too! Not sure where to post that, i'm sure there's a subforum somewhere here for it though.

Since i was last on this forum a lot has happened. I've been through some difficult situations and through it all, poetry became a way for me to vent, to express the emotions and turmoil in a way that was more coherent and understandable than the way i felt. I have written dozens of poems since, most of which tend to have dark undertones, but i'm proud of them. I feel I've gotten better at writing poems, so i want to share some of them here. I mever gave many of them actual titles for the poems so they stand without them for now.


Explore the depths, search the deep darkness.
To find that missing piece, you traverse the abyss.

Always looking for the shadow of something new,
Eclipsed by the past and pain that you yourself grew.

Sprouted from the doubt and guilt that was dormant.
And has once again arisen, awoken by your self torment.

The weeds of your insecurity climb up from the blackness,
And grip your heart, dragging it under into apathetic hardness.

Encasing your promises and dreams in a cage of fear,
Locking them away from anyone that may come too near.

Keeping them safe from those that mean no ill,
And guarding them from your own hope and failed will.

Clean

Well I don't know if this is absolutely necessary, but i'm doing it anyway.


I'm a long time member of Exilian, have been a member since 2010, but haven't been around since 2017 or so. Decided to pop back in to see what's happening and maybe share some peotry or something. We'll see.


It's nice to see some new faces around too!

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