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Art, Writing, and Learning: The Clerisy Quarter
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Writing, Poems, AARs, and Stories - The Storyteller's Hall
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Stories and AARs
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March 08, 2011, 02:48:01 AM »
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I never knew that protecting someone could be so difficult, or furthermore saving their life. In the back of my mind I knew that I had many reasons to die because of my decision, but that didn
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It's really good.I just think you need to make some sections more sharp, if you know what i mean, to increase the tension.
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I smiled at her as the trigger slid back
kind of jarred with me not sure why, maybe just it's me, you would need to get more opions because it isnt bad just doesnt feel right to me.
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Art, Writing, and Learning: The Clerisy Quarter
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Stories and AARs
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Preface