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Re: Khans Poems
« Reply #15 on: November 25, 2012, 07:32:41 PM »
They're good - the rhyme schemes are held together well, though I sometimes wonder if you put a bit more emphasis on rhyme than you need in a lot of these, it can cut the flow down a bit when you're using short lines and a lot of rhyme. Try writing some streams of conciousness, perhaps, that might help get these more introspective poems flowing a bit better. And streams of conciousness done well are awesome.

Good work anyhow, keep it up!  :)
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Re: Khans Poems
« Reply #16 on: November 25, 2012, 09:21:11 PM »
:) Thanks, I'm playing an RPG where my character is a Bard so expect much more.
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Re: Khans Poems
« Reply #17 on: November 26, 2012, 12:12:03 AM »
Nice job, Khan. And kudos for being one of the remaining content-producers on here. ;)
I'd be more apathetic if I weren't so lethargic.

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Re: Khans Poems
« Reply #18 on: November 26, 2012, 07:34:12 AM »
Thanks, :P Maybe I can get a Triumph if I write enough. ;D
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Re: Khans Poems
« Reply #19 on: January 19, 2013, 03:26:28 AM »
When writing this one I didn't exactly have quality in mind, a short poem written in a short amount of time is all it is.

Under a Willow Tree

As I sit under the willow tree,
In peacefulness and deep serenity,
With a gentle breeze flowing through my hair,
And the birds singing from above me.

I think of the future and all that's been,
and he choices I choose and all I've seen,
I wonder to myself, did I choose the right path,
And in the end, which way does my life lean?

And than I start to wonder the path I'd choose,
In the future, i know this life I'll lose,
But when I get to the crossroads of life,
What gate will I choose to enter through?

I stand up from my sitting place,
And bring my hands before my face,
"I know what I will do" I say,
"I'll live my life with this one goal,
To always try my best at everything in this eternal race".

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Re: Khans Poems
« Reply #20 on: October 20, 2013, 07:51:14 AM »
Ok, about time for another one I guess. This one here was inspired by a picture. I wouldn't be able to find it now but here's the poem anyway. I think this is one of the best pieces that I have done.

All Alone

All alone in a field of green,
A sight of majesty to behold,
The beauty true yet unseen,
With a hidden story untold.

A tree all on its lonesome,
Covered in green hued leaves,
Singing its lonesome song,
While swaying in the breeze.

Autumn’s beauty shows,
On the leaves of the tree,
But only it knows,
The beauty it can see.

Winters cold air sweeps in,
And the leaves fall to the ground,
The white days will begin,
And the snow will surround.

Spring arrives, colour springs forth,
And lush grass greets again.
The sun comes out in warmth,
And the clouds send forth rain.

Summer comes with the radiant heat,
And the tree sits there still.
Waiting for the next season to repeat,
Another tree, never will it meet.
« Last Edit: October 20, 2013, 07:52:49 AM by The Khan »
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Re: Khans Poems
« Reply #21 on: October 17, 2016, 09:46:11 PM »
It's been a while since I've written one of these, hasn't it? Anyway, I wrote this short thing on a bus in the morning whilst deep in thought. I may write more on it later, but for now, enjoy.

The Ring

That ring of misery,
Black white and silver,
Too far away for me to see,
Close enough to make me shiver.

That band of sorrow,
Has finally set me free,
But in doing so
Has forever trapped me.
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Re: Khans Poems
« Reply #22 on: October 18, 2016, 12:57:52 AM »
Damn son. That some scurry armadillo.
I'd be more apathetic if I weren't so lethargic.

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« Reply #23 on: October 18, 2016, 06:23:17 AM »
Scurry? What do you mean by that?
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Re: Khans Poems
« Reply #24 on: October 18, 2016, 02:27:04 PM »
I'd be more apathetic if I weren't so lethargic.

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Re: Khans Poems
« Reply #25 on: October 18, 2016, 07:53:43 PM »
Hahaha, fair enough
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Re: Khans Poems
« Reply #26 on: October 20, 2016, 12:42:49 PM »
Where are all these poems coming from? It seems I'm just in that sort of mood. This one's inspired my a song I've been listening to lately as well as recent events in my life.
The formatting seems a bit weird to me, but I don't know, it seems to work alright, so oh well.


Darkness
Don't let the darkness eat you up, it will swallow you whole if given the chance.

Keep your distance from this shadow, it is unsafe to be around, despite its cheerful look at a glance.

Stay away from this gloom and misery that has captivated you so. It's not worth the pain.

There is nothing for your benefit to be found, except for hurt and suffering to gain.

Don't let the darkness eat you up, let it go, and stop your light from becoming so dim.

Expel it from your life, ignore it's pleas for help, else your future will be naught but grim.
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Re: Khans Poems
« Reply #27 on: October 24, 2016, 01:44:29 PM »
This one's a bit personal I suppose, but it is about you guys too. Each and everyone of you are a huge support in my life and have been for years. <3


I apologize for my inability,
And for my low self esteem.
I'm sorry for my inadequacies,
And how I'm less confident than I seem.

My self loathing is always there,
Right next to the hatred of myself.
All I can see is how worthless I am,
When compared with everybody else.

Despite all these things that I see in myself,
Some people show me things I can't see.
They encourage my success,
And make me aware of the potential in me

But when I look at all the people who care,
All my friends and all my family,
To have so many people who love me,
Makes me as successful as I ever want to be.
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Re: Khans Poems
« Reply #28 on: October 24, 2016, 06:30:46 PM »
You are great and I am very glad I know you :) And you know Exilian is always here if you need it!

Also, enough with the excessive apologies, that's *my* character quirk :P
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Re: Khans Poems
« Reply #29 on: October 24, 2016, 08:19:27 PM »
You a boss Khan ;)
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