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StoryDragon's poems
« on: March 25, 2023, 06:00:47 PM »
A thread for my poems!

The Eyes of the Universe

The eyes of the universe
Look down towards earth.
And while you fiercely curse
Your network, (that's fast as snails,)
I search the western sky;
Where I spot, up high,

The beauteous orbs of sight.
One of which, being very bright,
Is proudly provided by
The goddess of fertility.
The other astral eye
Comes from another mighty

God, of space and thunder.
I stare into the eyes,
When I start to wonder
What the face would look like.
I cannot see the kind of smile
That's on it all the while.

Indeed, no more can be seen
Than the eyes at all.
Has there ever been
A face? Or is all
There ever was

These two single eyes?
They disappear.
And now they reappear,
The imaginary
Head tilted to
One of their sides.

What is going on?
Is it interesting?
Following the space's
Gaze, I see someone wrestling
With reality. It looks bad.
Once again, I start gazing

Upwards, to the eyes
Which now start drifting
Away from each other,
As if they do not bother
To provide the wise
Universe with sight anymore.

Then, does this mean
The eyes of the
Universe are mean?
Making people wrestle
With all the things they've seen?

Now, only a single
Eye of the universe
Is left. Whether that's worse
Or not, remains to be seen.
Let's hope it's not so keen
On terrorizing people
Anymore, now it's alone.


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Re: StoryDragon's poems
« Reply #1 on: March 25, 2023, 09:21:32 PM »
I currently can't read "Eye of the Universe" without my brain running over Outer Wilds stuff - I need to reread this in a few months when our mutual corvid acquaintance has finished playing the game :)

I feel like there must be a term for the particular rhetorical trick of breaking a logical sentence across stanzas but I don't know what it is: you do it really well here, anyway.

I hope you share more sometime!
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« Reply #2 on: March 25, 2023, 09:59:42 PM »
I really liked this!

Look forward to reading more :)
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Re: StoryDragon's poems
« Reply #3 on: May 17, 2023, 08:18:38 PM »
I wrote another poem!

A Lovely Surprise

Yay!
A lovely surprise!
Finally, when I least
Expect it, on a gray
And rainy day,
This very nice
Little booklet arrived.
And well... Thou seest,
Now I can write
It down, right
Where it belongs,
All my epic ‮.tihs‭


It came all the way
From South-Africa to me.
Sent by a Welsh Pixie
All of us should know
As a fabulous admin
Who revels in
Creating buttloads
Of calligraphy
In high quality.


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Re: StoryDragon's poems
« Reply #4 on: May 18, 2023, 05:36:25 PM »
Lovely!

I assume that's caught our ancient swear filter (which I should have turned off some time ago, but have left on because I'm sort of fond of the silliness of it) and "armadillo" is not actually the last word of verse one :P

And yes, WelshPixie is excellent :)
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« Reply #5 on: December 24, 2023, 10:00:17 PM »
I assume that's caught our ancient swear filter (which I should have turned off some time ago, but have left on because I'm sort of fond of the silliness of it) and "armadillo" is not actually the last word of verse one :P

Ooops....
Eh, that is correct...
I have fixed it some time ago. (I used a right-to-left overwrite now.)

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Re: StoryDragon's poems
« Reply #6 on: December 24, 2023, 10:05:44 PM »
Every year since 2019, I have written a poem for Christmas. This year it looked like I would not be able to do so, but at the very last moment something came up and I wrote a poem!
The verse form is the (Old) Irish form called 'deibide'. The third stanza is written in actual Old Irish. I tried to apply some characteristics of Old Irish poetry in that stanza, which was actually in order to help me get the rhyme right.

Notlaic ṡon

Christmas comes close very soon,
And then: “Time to fire maroon.”
May it snow instead of rain;
We want white winters again.

May the Great Birthfeast of Christ
Have you pleasantly surprised.
Lively laughter, lovely lights;
Warmth of friends and of tealights.

In ndomun fus-luget ban
broig snechtai. Teinnid lagach
loisi. Is airgairdech in
comlongad. Ro Crist genir.

I wish you a really rad
Time. And may you find thereat,
That next year’ll be great. Let us
All have a merry Christmas!


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Re: StoryDragon's poems
« Reply #7 on: December 24, 2023, 11:44:38 PM »
Oo that's fun! :) It's very lyrical in style, you could probably set music to it pretty easily.
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« Reply #8 on: December 25, 2023, 05:50:52 PM »
Oh, I adore "May the Great Birthfeast of Christ / Have you pleasantly surprised"! This poem was a very pleasant surprise, especially the fact that I got a whole sentence of the Old Irish (Ro Christ genir).