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Re: Mountain Leopards: An Adventuring Story
« Reply #135 on: October 05, 2019, 08:46:32 PM »
23. Meat Shields



Does this one come over OK? It was sort of necessary to shift plot along, but I just felt the dialogue was heavy and a bit clunky to write.
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Re: Mountain Leopards: An Adventuring Story
« Reply #136 on: October 05, 2019, 10:30:47 PM »
It's good! You got the tension well :)

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Re: Mountain Leopards: An Adventuring Story
« Reply #137 on: October 13, 2019, 09:20:29 AM »
Oh no. Now I'm actually going to be impatient while waiting for the next episode.  :)

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Re: Mountain Leopards: An Adventuring Story
« Reply #138 on: October 20, 2019, 09:53:06 PM »
24. Shields Meet


 
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Re: Mountain Leopards: An Adventuring Story
« Reply #139 on: October 20, 2019, 10:49:20 PM »
Great action scene! This was fun, especially Rusudan's nervously talking about her feet :)