Mountain Leopards: An Adventuring Story

[Jubal]

I worked out a rough framework for what I see as the whole story of these guys. This may have been a mistake, as it's, to say the least, long. If I can reach the end of what on my plan is Part One I'll feel I've done fairly well!

[HanSolo]

Great work so far! Also, have the Kadjis had lessons from Sauron in square mountain base building? If so, they've beaten him by remembering the fourth wall!


...oh no wait, that's the priest of Mushtar who remembered, my bad...

[Jubal]

Still failing to get the next comic done, but I did do a new top banner thingy:

[comrade_general]

Their faces remind me of the cereal guy

[bigosaur]

That's some nice looking banner. I like it.

[Tusky]

Yes it is a nice banner! Looks great on the first post

[Jubal]

18. Administration of Justice

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[Tusky]

Like it 

For justice! (And also adequate pension provisions)

[Jubal]

Thanks I felt like I had a few problems/difficulties getting the relative visual placement of characters right on this one (and possibly didn't get the scaling consistently good either). With this many people in a panel plus a lot of dialogue it's a bit of a push to squish them all in. Was that noticeable as a reader/does anyone have any advice on it?

[Ierne]

I didn't feel the panels were crowded, I thought you did the group scenes well. And I always find dissention in the ranks funny

[bigosaur]

Was that noticeable as a reader/does anyone have any advice on it?

I didn't see it until you wrote about it. But I don't feel it's a problem even now that I notice it.

[Jubal]

OK I think in retrospect maybe I need to be more happy to have speech bubbles covering minor characters - looking at big panel things in OOTS, Burlew actually does that quite a lot. But if it works for this page, I won't go back and change things here, plenty more comic ahead to write!

[justatoady]

Very fun!
I didn't notice any layout problems. The guy on the right in panel 5 seems weird because he's included without reacting at all, but his lack of expression is also funny...
Beardface is a great thing to call someone ^^

[Jubal]

Yes, I was aiming for disrespectful without quite being outright insulting on that one

I have most of the dialogue for #19 done, I think, but still not started on the art. I wish I could set aside a week just to build up a backlog of these.

[Jubal]

19. The Beard Helped, Though

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